Tourism+is+an+exploitative+industry;+it+strips+people+of+their+land+rights,+keeps+a+country+from+modernizing,+and+enslaves+the+people+to+service+jobs.

Ashley: Your thesis maps out each of the major key points that you will discuss in your essay. It is direct and to the point clearly stating your stance and views on the affects of tourism. I like how you used the "x, y and z." Good examples as well. I just think that the only word to change is "keeps" because the rest of the sentence flows nicely. Instead you could say, "restrains or limits."

Chantelle: I agree with ashley you definitly have a tripartite thesis statement. its very argumentative and is clear.

Sabrina: This thesis is very well put together. It shows a clear, argumentative stance and reveals a number of points to back up your argument.

Tsechu: I agree everyone ahead of me... that your thesis is very argumentative, it reveals your stand and it backs up your stand. I don't know if it will look like a run on or not but i think your thesis sentence will be stronger if you remove your semicolon and add "because."