Tsechu's+Thesis

It may appear that the Antiguan government is the root of the problems in the nation because of the corruptions; however, the current state of turmoil in the island nation is the result of British Imperialism.

Karen: I think that you have a solid thesis, its argumentative, choses a side and is specific.

Mabelly: I agree with karen, this thesis is pretty argumentative, chooses a side and is specific. However I think that this topic is pretty obvious throughout the story. If you could present a new perspective on this theme, like why are they this way? can it be changed? is there even someone to blame or is it inevitable for the government to be corrupt? This would make your thesis even more solid and pass the "so what?" test.

Sabrina: This thesis shows a clear argument and is a good start to the development of an informative essay.